Friday, April 18, 2008

Puerile.

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I meekly watched them all go, one by one
counting them all precisely, missing none

I counted the last with my ruptured frozen mind
then a sudden rustle, the sound of footsteps behind
I knew, it was your turn; I saw you as I turned around

those eyes, I couldn’t look, as I had to hold my tears
years of closeness I saw simply vaporize, thick in layers
all I did was love, and love you deep in all known colours
sorrows were shared, laughed and all faced it as pairs

my eyes fluttered a moment, sure I left nothing behind
I took a full minute to look at you with out a sound
I saw no love, hidden or else in those eyes so profound
with sudden vigour, like never before; I took my step ahead

41 comments:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wonderful work! I think I saw this before today, so if I already wrote about it, sorry. :)

Anonymous said...

Lovely Jac. Caught on well.

-Pria

Sapna Anu B.George said...

Such perfound words Jac.....love never fades from eyes,once it starts feeling,it express much more than words and at times even hearts.But your eyes should be able to read it,so also your heart.Lovely song...........and an apt capture.simply loved it and your words.

Gillian said...

Wonderful words Jac!!

Rose said...

I am glad u walked on.. Did those eyes belong to someone from ur childhood...?

..ME

TESSIE | മഞ്ഞുതുള്ളി said...

welocme back Jac...

don't stop writing ever :-)

BTW, am getting married in June... guy's name is Boby...

i keep chking ur blog regular... but cudnt put in a cmnt till now because of access issues :(...

Belated happy vishu :-)

Geets said...

sad but beautiful!

Janice Thomson said...

Good to see you again!
Love everything about this Jac - the words, the structure, the emotions.
So beautifully written. Excellent poem.(You may claim you are not a poet but this piece says otherwise)

Janice Thomson said...

Oh and Jac; did you paint this? Or is it a photo you post processed? It is utterly charming.

Rose said...

Hey.... I got to see the picture only now... Its GREAT!!!! :))

..Me

mystic rose said...

lovely and haunting.

MM said...

thats wonderful, jac!
absoultely stunning words!!
:)

MM said...

And ofcourse apologies for being late to get the Vishukani!! Thx so much and have a great week ahead!
:)

Anali said...

Such a sad poem. :(

Seema said...

Jac....Music is awesome and the lines are profound and more deeper than they appear...so much more!

VIDYA said...

a frozen moment?

:-):-l

magiceye said...

superb!!

samrina said...

Awesome!!

Beautiful words...

Take care

b o o said...

Sunshine through my window :)

gazza27 said...

Trueley wonderful jac.

Mahi said...

what lovely words! amazing:):)

Walker said...

Very nice Jac.
For a second the bird came to life, I thought until the butterfly moved

Dotm said...

Tried to leave a comment a few days ago, but I see it never posted.
Nice poem, but sense a sadness for a lost love in it.

Geets said...

hey jac, not the disappearing act again?

Nea said...

I see butterflies, or the passing of old friends, many imagines pop into my mind. a great bit of poetry here.

Neers said...

jac...this is wonderful! and so is the music! :) jus what the doc ordered! :)

thank you!

Jac said...

@andrew
That is a lot of compliment. Thank you so much.

@pria
Thank you for coming here.

@sapna
I am flattered and flattered.
Yes, I have eyes and they are open.LOL

Thanks.

@gillian
Thank you so much for the feed back.

Jac said...

@rose
You kidding ? Wait until you see the pic !

@tessie
Thats great news and all the best. You will not read any thing I write here because you are in cloud 9.

Do I know him ???
Thanks for letting me know.

@geets
You still owe me the crab story !!!

@janice
You just made my day eith you nice comments, though I still feel that artistically I am nothing.

No, It is not a painting, its a photograph I have taken some time back...plus my Roxio programme to give a paint effect.

I am not graced with that talent like you janice, but I have no complaints.

Sometimes I do pencil though.
Thanks :)

Jac said...

@rose
I told you to wait and see !!

ille ?


@mystic rose
Delighted to read you comment, thanks.

@MM
Thank you so much for the comment and thank you for accepting the belated vishukani.

@anali
If you are not sad sometimes, then you may not recoganise the real happiness.

Am I right ?

Jac said...

@seema

yes, they are !
It is how I write.
Thanks.

@twinkle
;)

DeLi said...

lovely and yet lokoing through it touches me in a melancholic way

zzz-writer said...

it all makes so much sense. you fathom this feeling - thats wat is important.

Jac said...

@magic
Thank you buddy !

@samrina
Thanks for the punctual visit and comment

@booooooooo
Through my window too.

@gazza27
Thank you buddy so much.

Jac said...

@mahi...my little Engineer@
I will amaze you more on your graduation day, if you will let me know.

Jac said...

@walker
I am delighted and wish we met least once

@dot
Are we all sad at some time or other ?

@geets
Not this time.
You still owe me the kerala crab "puranam"
:))

@nea
I do see the butterflies and ....many things more.
Thank you so much nea !

Jac said...

@neers
To hear wonderful from you; the thinking poetess ?

Flattered !

Thank you neers

@deli
I know that I am missing nothing...shows how delicate I am !

Thank you for the feed back.

Jac said...

@zzzzz
was wondering where you are !

True, it does make sense. Words have wings and life, isn't it ?

Rose said...

Hello... Evide poyi???

..Me

Jac said...

@rose
Da ivide !

Kandille ? I have posted too.
Thanks.

Aurora Antonovic said...

Wow!

TESSIE | മഞ്ഞുതുള്ളി said...

@ jac: they have blocked ur site at office... but i still read it wen i came to a cafe :)

his name is Boby... u dnt knw him... it is an arranged marriage... we got engaged last week :)