Saturday, February 18, 2006

My Valantine*


It is seven in the clock
It is heaven for to sleep
The door bell rang twice
I swore with anger in rise
So sleepy was my eyes

I crack opened the door
The street sounds were a roar
A girl aged six with eyes like a dove
Stood by the door,
A flower in her hand

She smiled like a moon
Humming a tune

She said to me, "the flower is for you"
My face lit up, with questioning eyes
Said the girl simply
"Valentine! Valentine! "

I wanted her pic
I wanted it quick
But she ran like a chic


*don't look at me that way.LOL,this is my imagination.

54 comments:

boo said...

'agirl aged six with eyes like a dove'

with the stars pouring out like sparkles?

what an image. bootiful :)

jac said...

boo
Yes, It was boo`tiful.

Thanks.

Nan said...

I like this, very nice. The pic is beautiful.

jac said...

nan
Delighted to hear that.
Thanks.

Mindinside said...

Days are each my Valentine
I want u come one day
and pass my shrine
pause a moment more
and remember the line
that here lies a heart
that needs no Valentine
to remind her of a loved one.

aklanta said...

nice

Chickadee said...

what a cute poem! I like it.

jac said...

mindinside
If I am welcome and if the shrine is not latched, don't be surprised if I come.

jac said...

OTW
Thanks.

jac said...

chickadee
Thanks for being here and thanks for the compliment.

thequeen said...

Neat poem!!
I miss you mr. Jac!

jac said...

Queen
Thanks for the compliment.
But I am here ?

MoodsAndColors said...

Imagination so wonderful,
thought so beautiful.

jac said...

m&s
You flatter me.

GEL said...

Dear Jac,
This is so light and lovely, as Valentine's Day should be.You're such a romantic I liked the springy meter in this poem and adore the flower. What a kind treat to your readers! Thank you.
Happy Belated Valentine's Day, kind internet friend!
*hugs*

jac said...

Moon
I consider it a delight to know that my small imaginative skit of a poetry, in fact a treat to my readers.
You are incredible with your elegence in words in these comments and in your poems.

Charmigly irresitable ! Thanks.

sophie said...

wonderful

jac said...

Sophie

Thanks

SierraBella said...

Hi Jac!
This would make a lovely song.

jac said...

Sierra
Thanks .
You were missed for long time.
Will you be staying.

GEL said...

J, please see note on my blog for the reason I can't post that poem yet. (If you listen to the audio, you still might feel from my voice... because that's an integral part of this poem.)

Lorna said...

I'm intrigued by your choice of a video. I like the music, but I'm not crazy about the images...

Monicaatje said...

What an imagination...
I really enjoyed it :)

jac said...

moon
Now I know the reason but..I still feel that if you have the words in print with the audio too, it would be more enjoyable to many.

jac said...

I too now feel that the video is spoiling the fun, it was just as a trial.

Just music it will be.
You are the first person to let me know that my readers are aware of a music. I was awry about the result and effect.
Thanks for letting me know.

jac said...

MoN
I missed your comments here, but then I already know that you are busy with your studies.

Yet, I have to thank you for coming and commenting here.

Monicaatje said...

Studies?? nonono, I'm on summer vacation!! Just lazy and distracted :P
Later!!

Dotm said...

Jac, where would we be without imagination? Our dreams and our thoughts have a lot to do with how we live our lives. Imagination can be relaxing and give us something pleasant to experience, or can even end up giving us a goal to work toward.
That is one romantic sounding song. I had never heard it before.

jac said...

MoN
Then would you give up a tiny piece of your lazyness and distraction for coming here every three days as you did before ?

jac said...

Dot
It is the words of maturity and sensible sense that you gave me in your comment.

Yes, you are right that those lines are so romantic and it is true that you never heard it anywhere...because I have never written it anywhere. LOL

Thanks for that beautiful compliment.

Colleen said...

Awww. That's sweet.

jac said...

Colleen
Unlike dialogues, written words are sweeter... when you read it again.

Thanks.

jac said...

Colleen
Unlike dialogues, written words are sweeter... when you read it again.

Thanks.

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November Rain said...

Choclate Kisses from a young girl lips
on your rough cheek

how do they know how to win your heart
with those rosey cheeks

Precious as gold Sweet as rose tips
handing out Valentine Cards

Anonymous said...

May your days be all happy
and Valentine :)

Mindinside said...

.... and you smiling.

sands of time said...

That was really lovely.To be awoken from your sleep by something so nice

jac said...

novy

The young girl of six, her colour coffee brown
My cheeks is no sexy, nor is it rough or silken

That smile from that black cutie
Equals to kisses a couple of million

She knows, she knows, I love them children
That card of valentine, I value with a trillion

jac said...

@ann
As you don't have a name, I can't write a poem for you.

yet, that doesn't deter me from wishing you a happy valentine or happy and valentine, where ever you are or whoever you are.
:)

jac said...

mindinside

Yes , I am smiling... with an invitation to you to join me.

jac said...

Pink Lady

That should be called loveliest !!!

Like an angel knocking at my door.
:)

Anonymous said...

dadjac......u r simply talented....am proud of u......MoN

November Rain said...

children angels every singel one
no matter the color or where they are from

if we could only be like them
we would not comit horrid sins

they remind of innocence we need
find it in us water and let it seed

then bloom in to a grown child we grow
with nothing but love to sew


in stitch and time of the web of life
pulling the weeds of strife

so when a girl smiles and gives a kiss
we find something that is so blessed

not even the poem or song
can give its meaning a place to belong

but we try because priceless are these moments we share
like the one you have had written about there :)

jac said...

Novy
That one is good enough to match a trillion compliments. You made my day.


Thanks.

jac said...

MoN
I am delighted.

SierraBella said...

Jac, I'll still be here... off and on.
I like the song that's playing!

jac said...

Thanks sierra for that appreciation !
:)

sophie said...

The young girl of six, her colour coffee brown
My cheeks is no sexy, nor is it rough or silken

That smile from that black cutie
Equals to kisses a couple of million

She knows, she knows, I love them children
That card of valentine, I value with a trillion

and who is this???

jac said...

Sophie

Didn't you read my post ?
and then you read novy's comment.


Now you will know.

meetu said...

jac thanks for granting me my wish.......i m so glad u wrote this..nobody can be more pleased than me u know why.only u know. its so subtle and sweet imagination.but is it really an imagination only ????

സപ്ന അനു ബി. ജോര്‍ജ്ജ് said...

These words are not beautiful jac........they are in their best hights of imagination. simply great

Jac said...

meet
:)

Jac said...

@sapna
Thanks.